Reflection Essay 4
The main idea of my essay is to help children who suffer from mental health disorders such as PTSD (Post-traumatic stress disorder), as well as the "normal" children that have passed through hard family situations, and indeed all my essay strongly supports my main point. All the quotes I added in my essay are structured with an introduction and an explanation after the quote. I used three articles in order to complete the requirements for this essay. Two paragraph talk about one specific essay, in other words, each article consist in two paragraph. The first paragraph of each article begins with a little introduction of the essay. Therefore, not each paragraph begins with the Author's name, but the second paragraph of each section mentions the name of the article and the author's name. I think I have provided enough information about my articles in order for them to be understood by the audience, generaly my essay is not hard to read and it is well explained.
I am satisfied with my introduction, I tried my best to explain everything with details, and I feel the same about my conclusion, well, maybe for the conclusion I can make it stronger in order to provide more support for my essay. I also had grammar mistakes, I am not confident about it because my goal is to improve my english and not to commit a lot of grammar mistakes.
What my peer liked about my essay is the introduction, and topic sentences for each article summary. This gives me a good clue that I am doing a good job, and that I am improving the way I do my introductions. However, my peer got confused in the conclusion, she mentioned I must rewrite some parts of it, which I thank her because now I can make it stronger. She recommends me to check more the grammar, to rewrite some sentences, and to fix the conclusion.
The parts of my essay that I feel it needs more attention is in the conclusion. For one way or another, the conclusion is just not as simple as the introduction. I know it is the final step in an essay and one of the most important. However, I will say it is not that strong. Therefore, I will make it stronger. In order to revise the weak areas of my essay I will read them again, and rewrite it. I think my professor will notice the same mistakes my peer saw and even more, but It will help me to improve it.
After all my hard work for this last essay, I feel confident about how it is going to turn out. Certainly, I invested a lot of my time on this essay. I carefully corrected the mistakes a made, I followed my professor's instructions in order to make my essay better. I added some text, principally in the argument part. My argument was quite weak.Therefore, I had to make it stronger by arguing and defending my points of view even more. Thanks to my peer and my professor I added more ideas, and as a result it is stronger. However, I feel that I did a good job and that I will get a good grade.
The main idea of my essay is to help children who suffer from mental health disorders such as PTSD (Post-traumatic stress disorder), as well as the "normal" children that have passed through hard family situations, and indeed all my essay strongly supports my main point. All the quotes I added in my essay are structured with an introduction and an explanation after the quote. I used three articles in order to complete the requirements for this essay. Two paragraph talk about one specific essay, in other words, each article consist in two paragraph. The first paragraph of each article begins with a little introduction of the essay. Therefore, not each paragraph begins with the Author's name, but the second paragraph of each section mentions the name of the article and the author's name. I think I have provided enough information about my articles in order for them to be understood by the audience, generaly my essay is not hard to read and it is well explained.
I am satisfied with my introduction, I tried my best to explain everything with details, and I feel the same about my conclusion, well, maybe for the conclusion I can make it stronger in order to provide more support for my essay. I also had grammar mistakes, I am not confident about it because my goal is to improve my english and not to commit a lot of grammar mistakes.
What my peer liked about my essay is the introduction, and topic sentences for each article summary. This gives me a good clue that I am doing a good job, and that I am improving the way I do my introductions. However, my peer got confused in the conclusion, she mentioned I must rewrite some parts of it, which I thank her because now I can make it stronger. She recommends me to check more the grammar, to rewrite some sentences, and to fix the conclusion.
The parts of my essay that I feel it needs more attention is in the conclusion. For one way or another, the conclusion is just not as simple as the introduction. I know it is the final step in an essay and one of the most important. However, I will say it is not that strong. Therefore, I will make it stronger. In order to revise the weak areas of my essay I will read them again, and rewrite it. I think my professor will notice the same mistakes my peer saw and even more, but It will help me to improve it.
After all my hard work for this last essay, I feel confident about how it is going to turn out. Certainly, I invested a lot of my time on this essay. I carefully corrected the mistakes a made, I followed my professor's instructions in order to make my essay better. I added some text, principally in the argument part. My argument was quite weak.Therefore, I had to make it stronger by arguing and defending my points of view even more. Thanks to my peer and my professor I added more ideas, and as a result it is stronger. However, I feel that I did a good job and that I will get a good grade.